you're a better writer than me, by far.
love the imagery.

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i own an army of pink bananas

Um, what imagery??

Lol it's shit and you know it. But look, thanks for being nice anyway, that's cool

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''Fanaticism is a matter of climate'' - Hitler.
''A bone heals, a bruise fades, but art, is, FOREVER'' - Otep.

....And I stuck my fingers into the sockets of the decayed .... and called it art...
... Forgive me.... please ...

The ending is a tad disappointing, but otherwise, it was really good.

And I don't find it to the point. I find it dancing around the point. It feels like the point you make is not the real point that you're trying to say, more a disguise. Disguising what it is you want to set free.

Just a feeling.

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I see your beauty in the semi-darkness. You ask me to turn the light on. I falter.

Hey thanks for the honesty, I really appreciate it It's refreshing in actual fact.

Maybe I didn't actually hit the precise point... thinking about it now, I didn't exactly, no. But what was going through my mind when I started writing this was... well I was very angry at me and basically all I could think was ''I hate myself so much''.... But I didn't focus in or anything like that. Something inside just refused to acknowledge the reason that made me want to write this.

Thanks again for the honesty

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''Fanaticism is a matter of climate'' - Hitler.
''A bone heals, a bruise fades, but art, is, FOREVER'' - Otep.

....And I stuck my fingers into the sockets of the decayed .... and called it art...
... Forgive me.... please ...

what the hell..i really felt there is a strong message. you don't have to PINPOINT what is actually there. we all know it...but not all of us admit it.

maybe structure wise it would have been better, in my opinion, to give it more flavor in the end...but thats just my opinion.. it is your writing and this came out great.